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Post by ineon on Apr 29, 2011 16:52:36 GMT -8
This is a poem if a Snowy Owl. I doesn't really ryme though.
A white blurr flies into the night
Talons sharp, eyes shining
Silent flight into the dark night
Black spots shimmer, feathers stir
What could it be?
A Snowy Owl or course
Flying back home as the sun rises.
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Post by asdda on May 2, 2011 4:41:32 GMT -8
nice  |
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Post by idinosaur on May 2, 2011 16:45:49 GMT -8
It is great, except I would not recommend using the word "night" twice.  |
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Post by ineon on May 2, 2011 16:47:15 GMT -8
Um ok, maybe thats how I wanted to do it though...... I said it wasn't going to ryme and it just came as an idea and would like to share it. :/
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Post by idinosaur on May 3, 2011 12:53:30 GMT -8
I know, I said it was great, but a using "night" twice didn't fit my taste. For example, I might have used darkness. But you have no need to change your style it is FAB-YOU-LOUS! |
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Post by ineon on May 4, 2011 17:55:59 GMT -8
That's how you do it. I do it my own way. Everyone can't write poetry just like you.
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Post by idinosaur on May 5, 2011 1:08:53 GMT -8
I know that did you even finish reading my post? I said it was fabulous and you don't have to chats how you write...
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Post by ineon on May 5, 2011 11:36:06 GMT -8
Well I will be making another poem for Keke. I may need help, so far I have two lines. I would like it to be kinda long and ryme I will post anpicture if Keke on it plus there is another poem not by me that I will post I would like to get it down by Sunday and Saturday.
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Post by idinosaur on May 5, 2011 11:52:15 GMT -8
Good... May you rest in peace, KeKe.  |
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